A poem of how I look like, feel like, and sound like as Fall 

Wearing a coat of gold and red.

My sound was soft and low. I love the rhyme and visual language in these first two lines

I turned around and saw a witch and a ghost,

“Vampire and blood treat time!” they said.

It’s Halloween!

I smelled pumpkins and blood

I pulled out my Ire Blood (Ire Blood?) , which is my Vampire teeth this line is a bit awkward; rephrase

“Blood-” I said with to my friend, Vampire

We sensed a mummy behind …

with a great taste of for blood. I wanna eat her blood, it smells great

The mummy stood between my friend and me

We turned around where the mummy is smoking and watching the phone with his head low this line is too long; try breaking it up or rephrasing a bit

“Rrrrrr!” we sucked the blood out and

Continued Acting…

the play

By Giselle