Museum’s Peanut Butter Floor Honors An Artist

A museum in Rotterdam, Netherlands recently covered the museum’s floor with peanut butter. (Great strong lead with lots of important info!) This unusual display honors a famous artist named Win T. Schippers. He passed away about a month ago at the age of 83, but his awkward and funny ideas continue to surprise people. (Wonderful background on the artist!) The art work is called “Pindakaasvloer” or “Peanut Butter Floor.“ (The period or comma should go inside the last quotation mark)

It was spreaded (spread is the correct past tense form of the verb) in a large hexagon. To make the art, museum workers followed strict rules left by Mr. Schippers. They were told to spread 34 pounds of peanut butter on each square meter. (Good job making this section much clearer in terms of the instructions) The artist wanted the peanut butter to be smooth in a boring way. He said that no one should stand on the peanut butter, or stand next to the peanut butter, lie down on the peanut butter, or try to learn anything about it. (Funny rules!)

Sanra Kisteras is the one in charge of the museum and said that Mr. Schippers’s work makes people ask, “Is this art?” or “Am I allowed to like this?” She believes this feeling of confusion is part of why this art work is special. Mr. Schippers believed that life can be serious and funny at the same time. (Wonderful closing paragraph!)

Nice job incorporating the feedback I gave you to separate your writing into distinct paragraphs! You did an excellent job on the second draft of this news article taking into account all of the feedback I left on your first draft. The distinct paragraphs really help break up the information in a smooth clear manner. Your lead is interesting and captures the reader’s attention with the clear facts you included. Be careful with some punctuation rules still. The comma or period should go inside the last quotation mark and be sure to check that you are always using the simple past tense whenever you can.

Sofia